Wednesday, January 30, 2013

Paragraph to Poem, Exercise 2

Romantic Getaway for the Feast of St. Valentine

She’ll be so overwhelmed
with the décor.

Glowing red of the EXIT
sign over the doors matches
the bright red of the cardboard
hearts, hanging eight in number
from the black ceiling.

The love continues:

Gleaming red heart
tinsel hugs the door
handles, lines the edge
of the shelf, bleeds onto the
large black counter, decorates
the bulky, gray cash register.

Spread more love:

Three glittery hearts,
half the size of my palm;
One sits cheerfully on
top of the cash register,
one waves from the top
of a pastry case, one
tries to disguise itself
as a straw, nestled with
the slender plastic tubes
wrapped in fragile white
paper.

I’m sure you’ll get another date.

Tuesday, January 29, 2013

Name on the Back of a Black-and-White Photograph


 The curly script on the back
of this grainy photograph
says your name
was Mary Christian. But
what is behind
faded graphite?
Did you always wear your hair
piled up in stylish do
like in this portrait?
Did you marry? Did you
sing? Did you pass on your
famous shepherd’s pie recipe?
Mary, if I said your name out
loud, imploring quietly, would
you hear, would you sigh,
would you say
“I’m here”?

Maybe I’d be crazy,
expecting your reply.
But maybe I’d be lucky to
hear you from someone
else’s lips.
The girl,
the girl two feet from me,
sitting at this café. Perhaps
she is your great-granddaughter,
she has your hazel eyes.
She gets up and says
“Excuse me,” as she bumps
into my chair. She’s going home
to open cupboards, make
your shepherd’s pie.
I see you embracing over a
steaming plate.

A Prayer


Close my mouth, stop
my voice—it cannot
fulfill expectation.
Take your fingers
and hold my tongue—
it moves in unholy rhythms.
Halt my pen, erase
its ink—it wheels
too freely.

Unless
I speak for you,
inhibit my faculties. Unless
I uncover a truth, press
to my lips a hot coal.
Mover of mountains, I say
move the mass that
pins me.

Feel the Love

The floor, filled with eighteen little round tables that are each surrounded by two or three chairs, resembles a maze. People must weave and squeeze through the chairs to reach a resting point. The glowing red of the EXIT sign over the double-door of glass matches the bright red of the cardboard hearts that hang eight in number from the black ceiling. Red ribbons tied to the hearts hang from white hooks. The love continues: gleaming heart tinsel hugs the bar handles on the glass doors and decorates the edge of the middle shelf of a white bookcase that sits just right of the door. The bookcase is a hutch, cabinets and a small counter under two shelves. The counter and shelves display products like coffee, tea, and travel mugs, which make great gifts. Six empty glass canisters sit in two rows of three on the very top of the hutch. They are large, probably able to hold several pounds of coffee beans. But the festive heart tinsel doesn't stop on the shelf. It bleeds from the other side of the doors as well, onto the large black counter that inhabits the entire left end of the room. It decorates the bulky, gray cash register, complimenting the bigger glittery hearts, numbering three, that spread more love. One sits cheerfully on top of the cash register, right above the screen that flashes the amount you owe. Another heart waves from the top of a pastry case. On the other end of the black counter mass, the last heart tries to disguise itself as a straw, nestling itself with the slender plastic tubes wrapped in fragile white paper in a clear plastic container that sits on top of the counter.

Is there a more romantic getaway for your Valentine? Why consider the other options on this campus? Bring your girl here, and she’ll be so overwhelmed with the decor, I’m sure you’ll get another date.

Thursday, January 24, 2013

Paragraphs into Poems

In reworking the paragraph about Peggy Clevenger, I attempted to suggest that although Peggy seemed a nuisance to the “Pineys,” what ultimately happens to her (at least what is implied) is surprising and cruel. Did the Pineys steal her gold, lock her in her cabin, and burn her alive? I wanted that to be a possible conclusion from reading the poem. When reading the paragraph, I was most drawn to the sentences about gold and thought bookending the poem with the references to gold could be a nice framework, which could put words such as greed and revenge in the back of the reader’s mind while reading the rest of the poem. The middle portion, containing the two instances of the rabbit and lizard, complicate Peggy’s image. She was bothersome, but did she deserve to die and her gold stolen? I hope that my poem asks this question.

About twice as long in length, the second paragraph allows more potential for differing interpretations. Is Charlie’s son Jim a picker who oversees or just an overseer? I think the answer to that question influences how the reader interprets the old picker who gives the tickets back to Charlie. Will Jim turn in those tickets to earn himself some cash or are those tickets for giving out to the other workers? Regardless, the old picker acts honestly when he could have claimed the tickets as his own. I wanted the picker’s honesty to be the main thrust of the poem, but I don’t think I did a good job. It doesn’t flow in the way I envisioned. If I were to revise the poem, I would try to cut out some of the description, painting a more immediate image of the inside of the packing house and the interaction between Charlie and the old picker. I ended the poem strangely by mentioning the line waiting for the outhouse on purpose, but I’m not sure if I succeeded in my decision. I wanted to suggest that, like waiting in line to go to the bathroom, the whole scene is mundane.

Monday, January 21, 2013

Paragraphs into Poems: "The Witch of Pine Barrens" and "The Pickers"


The Witch of Pine Barrens
(version one)

The Pine Barrens once
had their own particular
witch. Pineys put salt
over their doors to
discourage visits from
the Witch of the Pines,
Peggy Clevenger.

It was known that
she could turn herself
into a rabbit, for a dog
was once seen chasing a
rabbit and the rabbit
jumped through the
window of a house, and
there—in the same instant,
in the window—
stood Peggy Clevenger.

On another occasion, a
man saw a lizard and
tried to kill it by crushing it
with a large rock. When the rock
hit the lizard, the lizard
disappeared and Peggy
Clevenger materialized on
the spot and smacked
the man in the face.

Clevenger is a Hessian name.
Peggy lived in Pasadena,
another of the now vanished
towns, about five miles east of
Mt. Misery. It was said
that she had a stocking
full of gold. Her remains
were found one morning in
the smoking ruins of
her cabin, but there was no
trace of the gold.

The Witch of Pine Barrens
(version two)

It was said
that she had a stocking
full of gold— Peggy
Clevenger, their
own particular witch.

Over their doors, they
put salt to discourage
her visits.

A dog once chased
a rabbit and the rabbit
jumped through the window
of a house.
And there Peggy stood, in
the same instant, in
the window.

It was known
that she could turn herself
into a rabbit.

A man saw a lizard and
tried to kill it, crushing
it with a large rock. When
rock hit lizard the
lizard disappeared

And Peggy materialized
and smacked the man
in the face.

One morning her
remains were found
in the smoking ruins of
her cabin—there
was no trace of the
gold.


The Pickers
 (version one)

We had come to a clearing where thousands
of blueberry bushes grew. In the center of it was
the packing house—a small, low building with open
and screenless windows on all sides. In front of it
was a school bus marked “Farm Labor Transport.”

The driver stood beside his bus. He was a tall and
amiable-looking man, with bare feet. He wore
green trousers and a T-shirt. The end of the
working day had come. Pickers were
swarming around a pump—old women, middle-aged
men, a young girl. A line was waiting to use
and outhouse near the pump.

Inside the packing house, berries half an inch
thick were rolling up a portable conveyor belt
and, eventually, into pint boxes.
Charlie’s sister was packing the boxes.
Charlie’s daughter-in-law was putting cellophane over them.
And Charlie’s son Jim was supervising the operation.

Charlie picked up a pint box in which berries were
mounded high, and he told me with disgust that
some supermarket chains knock off these mounds
of extra berries and put them in new boxes, getting
three of four extra pints per twelve-box tray.

At one window, pickers were turning in tickets
of various colors, and they were given cash in
return. One picker, who appeared to be at least
in his sixties, tapped Charlie on the arm and showed
him a thick pack of tickets held together with a rubber band.

“I found these,” the man said. “They must
have fallen out of your son’s pocket.” He gave
the packet to Charlie, who thanked him and
counted the tickets. Charlie said, “These tickets
are worth seventy-five dollars.”


Getting Tickets
(version two)

The packing house—a small, low building with
open and screenless windows on
all sides stood in a clearing where
thousands of blueberry bushed grew. In front was
a school bus marked “Farm Labor Transport.”
The driver stood beside his bus and pickers
were swarming around a pump and
the end of the working day had come.

Inside the packing house, half-an-inch-thick
berries were rolling up a conveyor belt and into
pint boxes, and Charlie’s sister was packing the
boxes, and Charlie’s daughter-in-law was putting
cellophane over them, and Charlie’s son was
supervising the operation.

Picking up a pint box, berries mounded on
top, Charlie told me that some supermarket chains
knock off the mounds on top and put them in
new boxes and get three or four extra pints, and
Charlie told that me with disgust.

And one picker at least in his sixties tapped
Charlie on the arm and showed him a thick
packet of tickets held together with a
rubber band and the man said,
“I found these.
They must have fallen out of your son’s pocket,”
and he gave the packet to Charlie, and
Charlie thanked him and counted the tickets.

At one window, pickers were turning in tickets of
various colors, and they were given cash in return.
“These tickets are worth seventy-five dollars,”
Charlie said. Outside, a line was waiting to
use an outhouse near the pump.